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Grade 3 Informational - Process Writing Project
Hamsters
Feedback for Improvement
Topic: Hamsters
Main Idea #1: What do they look like?
Main Idea #2: Feeding
Main Idea #3: Why do you need to clean a hamster?
Main Idea #4: Playing
What worked:
Feedback with Prescriptive Lesson:
CHOOSE a Focus Skill: What skill will make the biggest impact for this writer?
Main Ideas Sentences: The headings on the page seem to stand in for the main idea sentences in most paragraphs. There are two questions that could be inferred to be main idea sentences. This student will benefit from instruction in writing a main idea sentence.
Elaboration: Learning to use the productive questions to elaborate details: “What does it look like? Why is it important?” will greatly improve the overall quality of this piece. In several paragraphs the author uses “What does it look like?” but doesn’t go on to explain why it’s important. Instruction in this section will greatly improve the writing.
Introductions: This piece needs a strong lead and an effective topic sentence that names the specific main ideas in the author’s prewriting plan.
Conclusions: This student needs to write a strong conclusion paragraph that includes a restatement of the topic and main ideas using word variety to remind the reader what they learned in this informative piece.
Grammar and Mechanics: The writing had several grammar mistakes. Lessons from Editing, Revising and More for Grade 3 would be a great tool for addressing some of the grammatical errors.
This student understands the purpose for writing information. There is a clear organization to the writing, the main ideas are distinct from one another and can certainly umbrella a number of details. Once this student learns to elaborate fully on the details, this writer will easily pick up on writing an effective introduction and conclusion.
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