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Grade 3 Informational Writing
What Tools Do You Need When You Travel
Feedback for Improvement
Topic: Tools for Travel
Main Idea #1: GPS
Main Idea #2: Camera
Main Idea #3: Journal
Main Idea #4: Map
What worked:
Feedback with Prescriptive Lesson:
CHOOSE a Focus Skill: What skill will make the biggest impact for this writer?
Main Ideas Sentences: The student needs to understand the value of rich language and varied sentence structure and with teacher direction, start to bring both to their main idea/reason sentences.
Elaboration: Learning to use the productive questions to elaborate details: What does it look like? Why is it important? Will greatly improve the overall quality of this piece.
Introductions: This piece needs a strong lead and an effective topic sentence that names the specific main ideas in the author’s prewriting plan.
Conclusions: This student needs to write a strong conclusion paragraph that includes a restatement of the topic and main ideas using word variety to remind the reader what they learned in this informative piece.
This student obviously understands the structure of informational writing but needs direct instruction on techniques to build strong main idea sentences, how to use the detail generating questions to elaborate fully on the details and then once these lessons are applied independently, then instruction on introductions and conclusions.
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